Thursday, June 30, 2011

Flash Fiction Extra: Waiting Game

AUTHOR'S NOTE: This Three Word Wednesday story features Vince Mott, a character from Diana's Diary, which is part of my Will and Diana series. You can read more about Vince by following the tag at the bottom of the post.

He had come here hoping to bump into her, but no such luck so far. Her good looks and elusive style transfixed him the last time she saw her here with her long legs, pouty lips and a Glock at her hip with her name spelled out on the handle in what looked like diamonds. She wasn't the sort to knuckle under to someone else's demands. Too bad for her. Vince hoped he would catch up with her before Quix from the Catorces did. Poaching on an established gang leader's turf could only lead to trouble, and although Vince liked to brag that he wasn't sentimental, he had a certain admiration for pretty girls who could hold their own in a fight. If the Catorces jumped her, it would be a fight she wouldn't win alone. Vince sighed and leaned against the wall...waiting.


jaerose said...

This is crammed as full as a novel..I like the Glock with the diamond encrusted name..who wouldn't..I hope she holds her own and he waits until she's done..Jae

Cynthia said...

Way cool. Reads like a good
film noir.

K said...

Hey Ann
The mood this sets is superb! I agree with Cynthia, very film noir. This smidgin of tale is like a black hole; sucked me in. Like a stingy snack; left me hungry. As always Ann, your writing is stellar. When I grow up ;) I hope that I can write with the same clarity and precision as you.
Hope you've been doing well.

Fear Not the Darkness but What lies Within said...

yes this definitely had the feel like a Mickey Spillane novel. I'd really like to hear more of this s.

Craig Smith said...

Short, but action packed! Would make a fun film.

Although I do question the wisdom having her name so brashly displayed on the gun. But it does seem to fit the character nicely.

Bluebell Books said...

well plotted.
keep it up.

Alice Audrey said...

I thought it was Diana until we got to the diamonds. I don't remember her handle studded with anything remotely diamond like.